Emptiness - A Poem
65A Poem:?
I was asked to write a poem containing the following words
soul please apple streets secret dark begging fruit heart
I am not sure if I am a poet but let´s try it. Here it is...
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I was born to be free But soon they arrested me To put me in a cage called manipulation Not the right place for a good education They never asked me for my permission Their gods were money and competition...
Emptiness
in the dark streets
leading to the secret places
of forgotten emptiness
you meet the old wise man
begging for an apple
please, give me this fruit ...
and your heart and soul
will be free
to join the other universe
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Thanks for the comment, I just decided to became a poet!
love this! Here I'm giving it a try:
Walking these apple streets
I'm begging for the dark fruit
And my soul asks, please give me the secret
of your soul.
I have to agree with I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s . . .it speaks volumes and then some. I really liked it. . and look forward to your new status as a poet!
Thanks, kartika, thanks wavegirl22, for encouragement, let's go on!
Poets make the world go round and life worth living!
Seems you are a poet! You should try it more often. :D
Great poem very insightful
wow, nice poem Bernd, I dont knwo that you can write too aside from your music, how are you? Maita
You indeed are a poet my friend nextstopjupiter, warm and inviting words!
Ben
Lovely poem, glad that I stopped in. You say that you don't ordinarily write poetry? Well, you should do it more often!
I am a poet, and it isn't easy. Yours is very good for a first attempt especially. One thing that might make it easier, is after you are finished, read it outloud, to see if the timing is right. That is half the battle.
That' a nice try. Keep it up!
what do you mean you just decided to become a poet - think you were born one mate - poetry comes in all forms and the one that comes from the heart is the best kind - thank you for this read.
i want to say i like it, but somehow the regular words beautiful, great... just don't capture.. i wonder what your definition of emptiness is here?
i think i'm seeing the connection to meditation.. i wonder if you will write a bit explaining the connection so i that i can post the explanation as a comment (or you could) on the Meditate for Peace facebook page where you kindly posted a link to this poem.. just a thought :) very nice work..
That was a good poem, you are always welcome to stop by,have a bed and a meal.Have an excellent day. (location Denmark, not that far away from you)
Great way to connect them together!
Awesome poem!
Oh wow this is a great prose. Its message is clear, yet encrypted, It is strong, yet silent, It is without rhyme and a beautiful poem. A lot of people have a problem with prose do to the lack of rhyme, they find it difficult to flow. But this is a flawless execution of a prose. I LOVE IT.
Beautiful, I love it. thank you.
Wow! Writing a poem with words given to you is not at all easy. You deserve 'awesome'!
Bernd - that was awesome :)
You did made a beautiful poem out of those words. A nice combination reflecting a thought, a meaning. Thanks for sharing.
Saying so much
in a few words
when given
a few words
you just brushed
a whole world
you just opened the door to a new world
apple, old men, wisdom
you gave us some
Thank you so much, your poem meets me where I was standing and wandering, your poem is a real jewel that shines like a star, its light showers me and I say: yes, thank you.
I love this! You were given words and came up with a beautiful poem :)
I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s 2 years ago
wow, this speeks volumes! Nice :)